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Comment on What Grade Would You Give My Paper And State Reasons As To Why? by i_am_an_

i_am_an_ — Wed, 24 Feb 2010 09:43:48 +0000

A C if I was feeling generous. You have very poor grammar skills and your spelling and sentence structure is wacky.
If I was a tutor and you were sitting with me, I would have you read the paper backwards, one sentence at a time, to see if it made sense.
Go back and reread, write, and take your time. It seems like you either rushed through or didn’t edit or revise.

Comment on What Grade Would You Give My Paper And State Reasons As To Why? by WP Autoblogging Plugin

WP Autoblogging Plugin — Wed, 24 Feb 2010 03:49:41 +0000

Ganicity…
I’ve shown you in the first question when you asked regarding this essay what was wrong, and I showed you plenty of examples of what you need to change.
As I_am_an_english_teacher said, I would still give you around a C.
There’s way too much citation, and it’s nowhere near spread out enough that it looks like you even wrote much. I dabbled in medical applications in forensic sciences before I began medical school, so since this is forensic psychology and it’s your major, it’d get a terrible grade because you don’t define certain methods, it lacks sustenance as someone can easily refute the sorority or fraternity stereotype for one example, and the grammatical errors and essay structure easily confuses readers. Where are the numbers coming from? What type of studies are being done? Why are these numbers the way they are? Why would certain methods work? Why is a control not needed in a study when evaluating motivational interviewing? What specific examples lead particular students to drink? What demographic generally drinks and when asked, why do they usually drink? Don’t stick a citation in there to glue it together if there isn’t any real preface or data to support the essay. Specify, support, and engage readers on the topic. Pump it up by cleaning it up and make it stronger with more supporting facts, including actual numbers and where/why these numbers are, and editing out weakening statements such as, “Some types of treatments to consider for alcoholic students are detoxification.” <– Detox is only 1 treatment, but there are many ways, so you’d have to specify what exactly detox is, what methods they utilize, and why it results in a high success rate.
Please, refer to the corrections I first gave you in one of your questions. Not all college students even like alcohol, and consideration of how fraternities and sororities select and it’s social effects is NOT central to understanding how substance use relates as not ALL sororities and fraternities do such acts.
“Yet, motivational interviewing can be used to begin the process of thinking about changing their ways on drinking” <— HOW?! Does it make them want more to the point they kill themselves and thus can no longer drink anymore or does it resolve standing issues that CAUSE them to drink in the first place? Specify, PLEASE! =(
I’ll leave you with this, as I hope maybe I’ve explained myself a little bit better.
I want to see this essay turn out for you, and you have said you do well in other classes I believe; so, as a medical student and someone who absolutely dislikes research papers that say there’s a fix but doesn’t show how or why, I’d give you a C or a C-. Good luck!

Comment on What Grade Would You Give My Paper And State Reasons As To Why? by Mitch R

Mitch R — Tue, 23 Feb 2010 21:26:37 +0000

Fail-
Because you’re a woman

Comment on Super Help Me! Hicn Blood! Drabkin’s Reagent? by gawsh!

gawsh! — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 01:57:32 +0000

mmm im not too sure cus haven read the whole exp but my guess would be to plug ur low, high, and “my blood absorbance” values into the hb equation to use on the x axis… thats assuming you were provided with the concentration of the standard… which you should have been!!
i.e.
conc of hb of low hb sample (g/l)=0.35/0.53 x conc of std (g/l)
conc of hb of high hb sample (g/l)=0.60/0.53xconc of std (g/l)
conc of hb in ur blood (g/l)=0.628/0.53x conc of std (g/l)
then you would have to convert those values to g/dl (i.e. x 0.10)
and use those values on the x axis…
from the information you gave thats my guess!! good luck! man i hate spectro and feel for you right now!!!

Comment on Super Help Me! Hicn Blood! Drabkin’s Reagent? by gawsh!

gawsh! — Tue, 09 Feb 2010 21:24:47 +0000

Comment on What Is A Smelly Stick? by sarahh_f

sarahh_f — Wed, 27 Jan 2010 13:01:19 +0000

I don’t know what the papers are called, maybe sample testers or something. They help the customers test differeft kinds of perfumes etc, before buying. So they can be sure what smells perfect. Also I think it’s best if you keep the papers for a day or two & then buy the perfume. Cause that tells you how long the perfume lasts, etc.

Comment on What Is A Smelly Stick? by email lookup reverse

email lookup reverse — Wed, 27 Jan 2010 09:08:30 +0000

I have no idea and I don’t think I want to know

Comment on What Is A Smelly Stick? by rdsukh

rdsukh — Wed, 27 Jan 2010 03:12:31 +0000

Honestly, I cannot speak for “customers”, only for myself.
I have no idea what the actual term for those bits of paper are, but I call them a complete waste!
Perfume mixes with the chemistry of your body, and does not smell the same on anyone (unless you spray it only on your clothes). One perfume can smell fabulous on someone, and completely horrendous on someone else!
I always – ALWAYS – insist on trying perfume out on my wrist or in the inside of my elbow. I can then evaluate how it smells on ME, how it “dries down” and how it smells AFTER it’s been on for 20 minutes or more.
You can’t truly decide how a perfume smells on YOU if it’s sprayed on a bit of paper; besides, the chemicals used to process the paper would also affect the scent.
Sniff the nozzle of the bottle, if you like it – spray it on you, and if you don’t… “next, please!”

Comment on What Grade Would You Give Me On My Paper And Exactly Why? by WebMan

WebMan — Wed, 20 Jan 2010 04:38:27 +0000

You have a lot of good information and ideas. I’m not sure how I would grade this paper, but I do have some suggestions. I noticed that many of your sentences did not flow well. You did not seem to use many transitional words. Also, you might want to try rearranging some of your ideas. Some of your paragraphs contain information that is either unrelated or should be separated into different parts of the paragraphs. I hope this helps!

Comment on What Grade Would You Give Me On My Paper And Exactly Why? by Maria

Maria — Tue, 19 Jan 2010 22:52:31 +0000

It depends on your academic level. But if you’re 16 just like me, I’d give this a B grade. You did fulfill the basic requirements of the question, however you tend to get a bit repetitive about college students and binge drinking. Perhaps you can add some creativity into your essay to make it more engaging, as well as being informative at the same time.